BLK Feedback 12/12/08

I showed our media teacher our sequence so far, even though it was not the final order and we still have some things to film/re-shoot
here is what she had to say:

• The girls part must be first-the narrative and story doesn't make sense; it looks like she's talking to her boyfriend. She should be first with an establishing shot of her house
• NO swearing in the scrip - it's not appropriate
• The close ups of the knives should go later, after the men have got her address because the pace of the action is begins to pick up and so it would lead in nicely into the quick montage of the briefcase.
• Also the titles may not be needed to break up the shots in the briefcase; a montage may be enough

She told us that our shots were really good and of a high quality which is good, but when we re-shoot we should get some more shots of King from the angle which you can see him in the mirror, as it is a really creepy shot.

Overall positive comments which is really good, and I feel we are prepared for our re-shoot.